The Enlightenment era exemplified some of most unsurpassed scientific and groundbreaking discoveries in history, however proved to disregard the values of the renaissance era. This era was unique because it did not follow the tradition structure, which made up earlier society. For example an era supported a weak emphasis on the status and power of families. Instead shifting to a more logical and economic valued culture, which proved to have forgotten about the past. Essential philosophers such as John Locke and Mary Wollstonecraft showed to have satirized the preceding era.
John Locke laid the groundwork for social equality during this era. Believing that each person begins life with ”tabula rasa”, or a clean slate he felt no man should be rewarded nor punished among birth. Born into a prestigious wealthy family and inevitably adopting the status and beliefs of that family is what Locke opposed most. He felt that each individual has his or her own ideas and thoughts rather than acquired values. Locke’s revolutionary idea was the inspiration to many philosophers who alleviated the profile of this time.
Mary Wollstonecraft rebelled against wealth society and demanded equal rights for women. Before the Neoclassical era, women had close to no rights in comparison to men. Mary felt this was wrong due to the fact that men would be nothing without women. For protesting against the upper class, Mary managed to have women overcome sexual discrimination during this time.
Many philosophers believed in making a changing in society and revolted against previous cultures. Such philosopher like John Lock inspired hundreds of intellectuals who later changed, improved, and encouraged even further change.
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